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I'm sorry, it looks like the last half of my review didn't come out. I had added at the end that I think this could be a really good story with a few minor adjustments like that :)

Aaawwww!! That's so cute! Paper cuts; yes those things are quite amazing really. Such a little, tiny wound, and yet they hurt like the bloody blue blazes! Working with books, I've had my share. Nasty little things....
And I loved Glorfindel's brief commanding tone. Oooohhh...just sent shivers up my spine. *grin*

Happy sigh, i got my BB&B fix.
So, what? Thranduil will fall in love with Elrond right? Right? :)
OOOOH how about the twins!?!?!?! Legolas? am i right? huh? huh?
NO THE TWINS WILL FALL IN LOVE WITH LEGOLAS' SISTER!? both of them!!??? Or just one?
but who will be with Legolas!!!??
UUUURGH!!
put me out of my misery and update soooooooon.

Teeheeee...paper-cuts! Well, as a bookseller who gets at least one a day, I understand that!
Thanks for the best wishes. I'm holding up all right. It helps to be able to come in here and escape for a bit!
And while Anon has made some excellent suggestions to improve readability, your story-telling ability is wonderful and has improved amazingly over the time you've been posting stories here. I always look forward to MORE! :)

That was a very sweet and considerate thing that Glorfindel did for Erestor. Poor Elrond. Hehe Will Legolas manage to find a loophole that allows his sister to marry either Elladan or Elrohir. Hmm......hahah maybe Legolas can end up marrying Elrond instead! =) Can't wait to see your next chapter!

Doh! A butterfly screen? Now why didn't I figure that out? You'd think I was thinking of jelly bellies and Elven Lords or something!
Awww...poor Elrond... a loveless bond with a pretty blond elleth who doesn't seem to keen on it, either. Perhaps Elrond can convince Thranduil to give her to Elladan instead? :D
Thanks for the warm wishes. My father is still critical, and the doctors really can't say much. My brother is there now, so I'm home for a few days, catching my breath. It could be a very long haul. Everyone has been so supportive, it's just amazing!
Thanks again!

The story itself isn't bad at all, but I think you might benefit from a beta-reader to check over some of your grammar. There's a couple of simple points that could pick this story right up :)

--> Elrohir shrugged "I know not. I just know that adar wants the hole ready and is going to let the elleth pick, I think he wants her to feel comfortable, she is a wood elf after all and Adars balcony is right above us and..." the younger twin paused and blinked at his brothers expression "...what" <--

If you have speech following "he said" (or similar), you need a comma before it, so: --> 'He said, "What are you doing?"' or 'He shouted, "Stop that!"'<--

If the speech follows an action, you need a full stop: --> 'Elrohir shrugged. "I know not."'

If you're finishing a sentence, either in speech or outside it, you need some kind of punctuation mark: --> 'The younger twin paused and blinked at his brother's expression. "What?"' or 'He cried, "Hey, stop that!"' or 'He whispered, "Perhaps it will not be so bad."'

If something belongs to somebody, it needs an apostrophe: --> "Adar's balcony", or "his brother's expression" <--

I hope you don't take offense at this - feel free to delete it if you like - but I think you could make this into a good story with a few minor changes to things like this :)

LOL, I thought the big picture of Glorfindel dying was kind of creepy too. It's such a violent scene, after all, to have in the bedroom. But I loved Glorfindel's question about how he'd feel with a butterfly mural. *evil grin* But what was all the measuring about? Erestor never even asked!

Legolas and his sister are so cute. I love that he's looking for the loophole, and his deviousness. My, he's going to be a handful in Imladris!

More! More I say! Oh I love the cute little Erestor and big, strong Glor! Want more now!

Hmmm...an arranged marriage to Thranduil's youngest? And she's protesting marrying Elrond? Foolish girl indeed! Lemme take her place, please...pretty please??? I bet I could bring Elrond around to thinking this is a good plan indeed! :D