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June 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Awesome can't wait for the next chapter
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June 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*sobs* What a touching chapter! I love this story so mcuh! I can't wait for the next chapter. I just want a happy beginning, if you know what I mean. I want Orlando to remember everything that Viggo has said to him while he was asleep and while he was still with him. I kind of want Dom and Elijah to take a break and let Viggo spend his time with him. I want Viggo to go rlanrlando's bed and apologize. something like.
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"Viggo leaned closer to Orlando, reaching out and tracing the air around his face, afraid to actually touch him. Afraid that touching him would hurt him. Afraid that he would turn away, or worse, lean back in to the familiar contact. His heart was aching, and he blinked away the tears that threatended to fall. He had no right to feel pain. This was all his fault. Evrything was Viggo's fault. He had caused the one person that he never wanted to hurt more pain than anyone should ever have to feel..."
Then proceed to tell him how sorry he is about everything. Of course he kind of did this with Dom and Lij but I want Viggo to be the one to tell him. Of course you already have a plan but hey, it never hurts to tell the way I see it happening. Nevertheless I can't way for the next chapter, did I asay that already? Ah well, please update soon.
Also I think that the first six chapters dragged a lot, there were too many flashbacks and talks about what happened and what should have happened and who was to blame and who was blaming who etc. etc. Keep up a faster pace. I understand that the info was vital to the story but it was still all thrown together. Spreading it out more would have helped a bit for the readers.
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"Viggo leaned closer to Orlando, reaching out and tracing the air around his face, afraid to actually touch him. Afraid that touching him would hurt him. Afraid that he would turn away, or worse, lean back in to the familiar contact. His heart was aching, and he blinked away the tears that threatended to fall. He had no right to feel pain. This was all his fault. Evrything was Viggo's fault. He had caused the one person that he never wanted to hurt more pain than anyone should ever have to feel..."
Then proceed to tell him how sorry he is about everything. Of course he kind of did this with Dom and Lij but I want Viggo to be the one to tell him. Of course you already have a plan but hey, it never hurts to tell the way I see it happening. Nevertheless I can't way for the next chapter, did I asay that already? Ah well, please update soon.
Also I think that the first six chapters dragged a lot, there were too many flashbacks and talks about what happened and what should have happened and who was to blame and who was blaming who etc. etc. Keep up a faster pace. I understand that the info was vital to the story but it was still all thrown together. Spreading it out more would have helped a bit for the readers.
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June 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
HOLY SHIT! There better be another chapter by Thursday before 4!!!, Af, After that , I wont have access to a computer for a month! Please updates ASAP!
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June 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i can not wait for the next chapter please write it soon this story pulls at the heart strings*sob*
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June 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god! You've made me cry so much! You have to update soon. You describe the emotions so well.
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June 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*GASP* NO!!!!!!!!!!!! You can't...go... *gasp* Go back and keep writing, little missy! Right now!!!! Don't leave those eyes just staring! AAARRRGGG! PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Rutaari
Rutaari
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June 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hey, sorry to bother you again, but you MUST update this fantastic fic!
please!
you MUST be on summer holiday right now... ? are you?
please please update asap, i don't think i can wait any longer...
*sobs*
i really need more!!!
*huggles*
litzy.
please!
you MUST be on summer holiday right now... ? are you?
please please update asap, i don't think i can wait any longer...
*sobs*
i really need more!!!
*huggles*
litzy.
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June 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I am loving this fic. The characters are really well written especially the emotion you describe in them. I hope you continue to make the description of Orlando's recovery as well written as the beginning. Oh and one last thing PLEASE update soon!!
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June 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter.
Wait to read more.
I still love what I read, thank you.
Keep up the great work that you are doing with your fic.
Sivan
Wait to read more.
I still love what I read, thank you.
Keep up the great work that you are doing with your fic.
Sivan
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June 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OMG! He's waking up! GO SEE HIM, VIGGO!!!!!!
I loved Elijah's ranting and raving. Amazing. I can just see the little squirt going off like that. Scary.
Rutaari
I loved Elijah's ranting and raving. Amazing. I can just see the little squirt going off like that. Scary.
Rutaari