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I very much like the changes..'s 's perfect....
Really I mean evil Sean was a bit much... and i like him so much :)
Thank you for the notiication e-mail

bye
Shieldi

Okay, now this is going in a... weird direction. So you have this girl who's beeusedused, is addicted to drugs and alcohol and taken in by some stange guys. So far so good. But now you go and actually *tell* them about her past (abuse I should guess) and they *still* go and molest her? I mean, this whole evil!sean thing aside, what man with a bit of commen sense (and I'm talking about Viggo and Orli here) would go and just... snuggle up and kiss her? I liked where the story was going in the beginning, but now I'd really like to know what's going on on all their minds... maybe you have something coming up to explain it, but still. With these short chapters you're posting you leave the reader wonderin you you actually know what you're talking about. Explain, baby, I need more background on the girl.

i apologize for the short chapters, but i also go back and reedit them. see, if i don't post them using the server as i type, i get confused and have to reedit a great deal after uploading. tried it, failed at it. it's back to just typing everything in for me. I have my mind set on a certain direction here, i just don't wand to reviel it. for a period of time, after the chapter with viggo, and orlando opening the door, i had a brain fart and suddenly didn't know what i wanted, and it's still possible that i might redo a great deal because i am just not completely satisfied with the past two chapters, one of which isven ven finished so i can still change. Personally, i want to do more with her inner pain right now, aka: the drug addiction. And I'm not saying, yet, what the doctor told viggo cause it's gonna be an interesting ending. i got it in my head, but don't want to give it away. sorry about the delays in getting it up, however.

Hpüing Viggo would go away?!
Stuuuupid ;)

But seriously now I have a little enquiry. Cause I find it extremly inconvenient to starta chapter and then add the rest in the same chapterthingy, you know what I mean - cause then you always have to double and triple check if there is something new...
But it's up to you how you post :)

hug
Shieldi

I'm not sure why i am always ing ing logged out. I'll have typed up a lovely chapter, just perfect to my wants and POOF!! i click save and find out i was logged out and loose it all. Now i am using word perfect to type it up in, lol.

Evil sean leave her alone! *pouts*
And she didn't kiss Orli he kissed her!
I would only kiss Viggo too *sigh* and Sean maybe - but not evil sean ;)


very good :)

More please! Faster! Yes! Um... sorry. *lol*
I really enjoy your story - although I would have gone for a Viggo romance. ;-) But still: Keep typing and posting, baby. And do it NOW!

It's going to be a mix between viggo and orlando with her having to choose in the end. not saying who wins though. ;-)

Still loving the story :) And yay for the new chapter!! I'll review asap.
I really love your wirting and the poem was beautitul! Please continue :)

*siiiigh* Viggo.

Off topic but does anyone know how anyone can go for Orli of there is Viggo?!
God...

very nice dialogue... *lol* could compleely picture him, brilliant!