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dude...

all that for sneezing? or was it for the spying? whichever.. a tad extreme.. and painful sounding..

will we find out who Thranduil and them was yelling at?

for the technical stuff, I noticed a few bits that didn't make a lot of sense, the part right before he was talking about something used on snakes. did didn't quite understand that...

but otherwise, I didn't see any major issues, good job :)

update soon please!

I really think Thranduil is OOC. What kind of Elf would do that to his child? Is there any reason for him to be evil, other than the grief after his wife's death? I mean, has the grief made him mad, or something? I think you should work some more with your plot. If you're going to write over 30 chapters, I think this needs something more than Legolas being raped and abused to stay interesting.

Also, let me give you a piece of advice - don't put author's notes in the middle of the story. It's actually quite annoying, and disrupts the flow of your story.

I also don't think it'sy smy smart of you to demand at least five reviews before posting the next chapter. I understand if you want feedback (hey, who doesn't want that?) but I wouldn't make it a condition to keep writing. You write fot your own sake, don't you, not to please others.

Take no offense, but this is my opinion,

regards,

~ Amanda Lee

I just wanted to let you know that you're very cool for not giving up on this fic. I hope you don't pay attention to any flamers you get because they forget that it's just FICTION!!! You should really keep gong regardless of them.

Hey-I thought that this chapter was a great start to something that could be really great-I'm dying for you to update, so do it soon!!!!! And please try to
makethe chapters jsut a bit longer.....
Cheers!
Elf Girl

;-) You have an interesting nerve, demanding reviews before updating such ein poorly written, poorly researched piece of Scheisse. Have you ever experienced the being raped before? I have, and it is nothing of which to make light. Fanfiction.net knew what it was doinen ien it took this down, it is a waste of bandwidth. Elves do not rape, especially their own, because a raped Elf DIES. End of story. Please turn your writing to something much more worth one's time.

Keep going! It looks promising!