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November 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!! That was the best story I have ever read. I hated that Legolas was raped and he died without love or hope. But I love how you wrote it. Please write more stories equally as good
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November 24, 2003 at 12:00 AM
OH no! I can't believe you ended like that! He died... no! At least he found his mother and he could be happy after all. Hope you write more soon.
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October 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Awww... Poor Legolas. I feel so sorry for him and yet... (I don't?) I don't know. Can't explain it. Gues my sadistic side just came out while reading this, hm? >:) Anyway, to get back on track... ^_^' It's quite an interesting story, well written too and I certainly hope to read more of it any time soon.
I also happened to read your notes by the way and I hope that in the future flamers will stay away. I understand that they must be quite irritating. *sigh* I mean... you've warned people not to read it if they don't like it and yet they still keep on whining. *rolls eyes in disgust* Well, just don't let them discourage you or anything. It'goodgood story and you should keep on writing! And hey, if they don't lit..it... Well, that's their problem, right? :) It's a free world and you're allowed to write anything you want! So there! :P
I also happened to read your notes by the way and I hope that in the future flamers will stay away. I understand that they must be quite irritating. *sigh* I mean... you've warned people not to read it if they don't like it and yet they still keep on whining. *rolls eyes in disgust* Well, just don't let them discourage you or anything. It'goodgood story and you should keep on writing! And hey, if they don't lit..it... Well, that's their problem, right? :) It's a free world and you're allowed to write anything you want! So there! :P
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October 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I loves it, but how could our little Leggy-Loo-Loo break so easily? Don't rush things, it's funner if you drag things out, I say. ;)
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October 15, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I am glad that you continue writing. Ignore those flames and keep up your good works. Do not be so sad about them. you have other readers, do you not? I hope we would be able to read more of your work.
Good luck.
Good luck.
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October 15, 2003 at 12:00 AM
you seem to have a problem with any review which is not enthusiastic. you keep insulting people who offer their opinion - which is the point of a review, right, otherwise why bother to have reviewers at all? so i hope you´ll accept this review. it´s NOT intended to be a flame, although i´m not feeling too friendly.
first of all, you are right in a way to point out to reviewers who have a problem with the subject of rape etc. that this is the point of the story and that you gave the appropriate warning. alright, this is not MY problem. my problem is, that the story isn´t written very well. first of all, there is no plot. and while this is not always necessary, it´s a bit bothering here - because someimes you seem to hint at some development, only to abandon the idea in the next chapter without any discernable reason ( for example, what happened to the screams in the dark torture?) so ther is no storyline. plus you keep changing perspectives. this is supposed to be a first-person-type of story, yet you keep describing things that legolas can´t know/see, in chapter seven you even abandon the first-person completely. this is extremely confusing. it matches the overall structure, though, the general carelessness with which you treat the description of situations, surroundings etc. a beta reader would also be a very good idea, if only to avoid the repetitions of words or expressions. if you want this story to be no more than it is, a cheap thrill and rather carelessly written, alright. it seems to be enough for some people. just don´t make the mistake to believe the enthusiastic reviews. you semm to care for writing, so i really think you should attempt to do better. as a proof that i´m not flaming you because i hate the subject you have chosen (legolas-torture), i´d like to point out a story to you: "dark leaf" by jastaelf, which has become a bit of a legend. it´s been removed from ff.net when the nc-17 ban hit, but the author is still there and a link is provided. go and check out how these things can be done in literature-style. it might help you to understand the disappointment of some of your reviewers (who, i might say, managed to criticize you without telling you to "fuck off"). cheers and keep reading, maybe even writing.
first of all, you are right in a way to point out to reviewers who have a problem with the subject of rape etc. that this is the point of the story and that you gave the appropriate warning. alright, this is not MY problem. my problem is, that the story isn´t written very well. first of all, there is no plot. and while this is not always necessary, it´s a bit bothering here - because someimes you seem to hint at some development, only to abandon the idea in the next chapter without any discernable reason ( for example, what happened to the screams in the dark torture?) so ther is no storyline. plus you keep changing perspectives. this is supposed to be a first-person-type of story, yet you keep describing things that legolas can´t know/see, in chapter seven you even abandon the first-person completely. this is extremely confusing. it matches the overall structure, though, the general carelessness with which you treat the description of situations, surroundings etc. a beta reader would also be a very good idea, if only to avoid the repetitions of words or expressions. if you want this story to be no more than it is, a cheap thrill and rather carelessly written, alright. it seems to be enough for some people. just don´t make the mistake to believe the enthusiastic reviews. you semm to care for writing, so i really think you should attempt to do better. as a proof that i´m not flaming you because i hate the subject you have chosen (legolas-torture), i´d like to point out a story to you: "dark leaf" by jastaelf, which has become a bit of a legend. it´s been removed from ff.net when the nc-17 ban hit, but the author is still there and a link is provided. go and check out how these things can be done in literature-style. it might help you to understand the disappointment of some of your reviewers (who, i might say, managed to criticize you without telling you to "fuck off"). cheers and keep reading, maybe even writing.
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October 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Really enjoying the story. Keep up the good work. And don't listen to the flamers. We're fanfic writers; we can bend and shape any pre-established story to our own imagination! We write as we see the story (or rather the story that isn't told). Can't wait for Chapter 8! I'll be looking!
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October 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
You are back! That good! This chapter was a bit confuse to me but I got curious about the next one... he broke... that's so sad! Write more and don't take tooooooooo much time to update, girl!!! :-D
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October 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I think you are doing a great job. I look forward to updates on your story. If you need a beta reader, i am willing. Just let me know.
Keep up the good work.
Ealhswith
Keep up the good work.
Ealhswith
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October 8, 2003 at 12:00 AM
All I can say here is, ignore the flames. I hate the very idea that flames may stop you from writing. I'm here. I'm reading. And I'm enjoying what I'm reading. This is a space for adult fiction, and I want to read more of this. Please keep writing!!!