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for Kitchen Lesson

by Callista

person Anu
schedule July 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
That was sweet, and cute. I loved it. Two things I noticed and would like to point out to you are:

1. Erestor's a wee bit girly, but I don't think it'll do him any harm.

2. Raw eggs as lubricant is dangerous, as well as not slick enough. It'd just seep away. Raw eggs can carry salmonella, which is why you're also not supposed to use mayonaise, which contains raw eggs. It's just not safe. I understand you're a woman and you li wou wouldn't need it, but would *you* use eggs as lube? I think not. Brr, at the very least, if you chose to ignore the health hazard. :)

All in all, though, a truly charming story. Kudos!

-Anu