rate_review Reviews

well showshow promise but--- in one chapter you said that Elnihir fell and broke his leg and the next chapter has him riding with Glorfy with no mention of a broken leg. Chapter ten has Ecthelion rescuing an efling with no arms? Hello- please re-read your chapters. Site is a place- sight is vision. Newly comer should bwcomwcomer. You get where and were mixed up, new as in brand new and knew as in knowledge and I really do not think elves say OK.
I really like the story and all you have to do is re-read it and either get a beta reader or be careful when using the spell check because spelling errors are a distraction from your story.

Very interesting and nicely drawn together. One niggly bit. You statethe the disclaimer that you own Silinde. Um............no ya don't. Silinde was an elf from Mirkwood who accompanied Legolas to Rivendell for the council. Tolkein owns him.

i would like to know if you made erestor and Elladan twins on purpose or you screwed up who Elladans twin is i mean no offence but i find it increadibly annoying, i have no promblem with it but i would like to know so i can better understand the story line, so far you story is interesting, and for the record if you do not know Elladan and Elohir are the twins erestor i think is an advisor to Elrond, please to not take offence to this review i am merely curious other than that your story is very intriging!

sighned Lena