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for Deeper than breathing

by ziggystardust3

person pip
schedule October 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Three

Your Legolas has me completely captivated, and the trick he played on Eomer shows that he does know his effect on those around him. Nice!

Pip :)
person pip
schedule October 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter Four

Oh, I am glad Grima is dead, though I do feel a little sorry for him. I am eager to read what is happening in the dungeons now. I wonder if Eomer has finished cursing Legolas yet? *laughs*
person MewMew2
schedule October 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Thank you so much for reading my review! I know some authors merely like to see the number of reviews and don't actually read them, so thanks. 0//0 You did a great job of wrapping up the conflict with Grima, both inner and outer, I always thought of him as yes, a 'bad man' with foul intentions, but not a necessarily 'evil' one. Please update once more when you have the time and /or inspiration.
person MewMew2
schedule October 12, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Interesting, I like this different take on this section of the LOTOR timeline. Please update once more when you have the chance.
person pip
schedule October 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter One:

I think I shall review here too, because this story really deserves it. You have a wonderful way of writing, and from the first chapter I have to say how much I love your Legolas; he's so bewitching and mysterious, and I am sure he is aware of it too. Grima is done fantastically well, and I can see him in your descriptions perfectly. Also I have to say I adore the little bit about the song, and how Grima has forgotten his.. reminds me a little of the beginning of the Silmarillion.

Pip :)
person pip
schedule October 4, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh, the tattoos.... you make me want Legolas myself, and I do feel some sympathy even for Grima - he couldn't help drooling *g* Poor Eomer though, and what a cruel choice for Grima to put before him. Wonderful, well-written and engaging. I did see one thing that threw me a little though; a repeated word choice somewhere (goes back to look for it).

Here: [...] so close he could feel his hot breath, smell the rancid stink of his breath.

Thank you for this fic! :)