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January 14, 2014 at 12:00 AM
O wow poor Las
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January 27, 2010 at 12:00 AM
For what it's worth - I don't notice many typos and you are able to create pictures of what is happening and tell the story well. I find it hard to review a story until it is several hundred words along because i need a story to review. But your writings not so bad it drives me away and neither is what I have read so far. So I can't give you more info but that's my problem not yours. :)
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January 25, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for the wonderful chapter. I enjoyed your description of Lass. Can't wait for the next chapter!...Macheil
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January 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Leave it to Glorfindel to help Lass understand a few things. Great chapter!....Macheil
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January 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Not only is this a great story, but now it's a mystery! I love it!! Can't wait for the next chapter.....Macheil :)
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January 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Each chapter keeps getting better and better. Can't wait for the next!....Macheil
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January 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm really enjoying this story! Please keep writing, you have peeked my interest...lol. Thanks...Macheil
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January 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting so far. The excessive violence done to poor, defenceless Las was a bit hard for me to swallow but I am sticking around to see how it developes.