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January 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Your story's good so far. I really like where your taking the story and you write well. One bit of criticism, you really need to watch your punctuation (sometimes it's not there when it should be) and your sentence structure (sometimes things that should be one sentence are 2 and vice versa). Otherwise I'd say it's great and I can't wait for you next update.
schedule
December 31, 2007 at 12:00 AM
update soon
schedule
December 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Totally awesome start. "Body Servant" never heard of that one before...nice!!!! I'm really
digging it, so I hope you don't stop writing!
digging it, so I hope you don't stop writing!