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The scene between legolas and maglor at the end was very touching and the writing was excellent. I didnt expect maglor to kill brandir but im glad he did - he was horrid and deserved it. It was hard to feel pity for any of the humans in the cell apart from he really young frightened one. Off to read the next one now - binky x

I think that was the best chapter yet! Sauron's evil was hammered home to anyone who could make the mistake of doubting it. He also tortures Maglor by killing anyone who reminds him of him, so reinforcing the idea that he could/would like to kill him at some point and that being allowed to die at present is not an option (he enjoys holding that power and maglors reaction to it). I may be wrong but i think sauron "needs" to kill maglor and so has maglor substitutes to fulfill that "need." I suppose being a hedonist would entail pleasure/pain as being of equal value. He seems to be the perfect example lol I may be completey wrong however lol tx binky x

Still reading and still loving this! The mental and physical tortures are just so exquisite! *shivers*

Hey!!

Yes, sorry, I've been silent the last few days. Work has been an ever-loving bitch, and just now had a chance to sit down and catch up.

As usual, I know I'm sounding like a broken record and wish I could leave better reviews, well done; and I'm still loving it. I'll be anxiously awaiting more.

Later,
Daphne

Wow! I am riveted by this story - I cannot wait to find out what happens to Legolas and his children. Update soon!

Thank you for explaining all that for me, not many authors would. As for the birth scene, is it weird that all I could think about was Katie Holmes and her odd birth? LOL, a little creeped out by the idea of a half-uruk hai baby not gonna lie, but seems cute enough... guess we'll see the truth behind the nature v. nurture debate

Well, the squee factor wasn't as bad as I thought it was going to be. I'm a court reporter, so I've actually seen pictures of horrendous stuff -- murders, rapes, suicides, fatal car accidents -- that it didn't phase me too bad. I just hate it when things involve children. Now I'm just worried about the babies, what Sauron has planned for them; if Legolas is rescued, what would happen to them, especially the baby that has Uruk-Hai blood -- a half-breed. So many questions, so little time! (bg) Still loving it, and I really am appreciating all of your hard work.

Later,
Daphne

You end it there? I love the psychology of these last few chapters, the way Sauron plays Legolas and Maglor off of one another. Very interesting, especially this last chapter when Legolas was brought back. I have horrible visions of the next chapter, the babies being taken forcibly from Legolas' body. Just guessing here, of course.

Later,
Daphne

Ah, I thought to drop you a review. Being an author myself, I know how much fun it is reading them and how much they motivate to continue writing a story.

The story is great so far. For one he has quite a unique and interesting relationship triangle between Sauron, Maglor and Legolas. That initself, I mean this unsualness, makes the story worth reading, because it keeps the story unpredictable. Most themes already have been written about somewhere at some time and after reading fanfiction for so long, I barely read something 'really new'.

I also like your style of writing. Especially young authors seem to solely write about the character's actions, for clarifiction, I mean they write only about what people do. And thus they tend to forget that in their position as omniscient narrator they can also 'see/read' their characters emotions and therefore describe them to their story-readers. Thus many stories, in my personal opinion, lack depth.

Whereas you mostly, or at least in many scenes in this story, write from the viewpoint of the character, meaning what they think and what motivates their actions. Thus you enable the reader to see a scene through the eyes of the character rather than viewing it from a place without. The best example for this is Legolas' torture scene.

Instead or 'boringly' describing what is done to him, you describe what he feels what and when it is done to him. The reades does not actually 'see' what happens but he knows it nonetheless. And that is *writing skill*.

But with all the praise I still have a suggestion, if you would care to read it. I think I noticed at some points in your story that the sentence structure became somewhat monotone. You often started the sentence with the subject of the sentences. He, She, they, the, etc. I would try to variate more.

Holy crap! I go away for a few days and this story has doubled in size! I feel so bad for Maglor, what was it that he and his brother did? I'm not familiar with his story. And is Legolas about to give birth? I almost want his suffering to be over. That orc rape was just awful. But what will Sauron do with him once he's not pregnant, kill him? And why isn't Maglor pregnant, is it so terrible? As you can see I'm full of questions waiting for the next chapter to explain them!