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for I don't want to lose you

by anitablack

schedule July 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nyah, i got really annoyed with the O.C.D use of the exclamation marks and couldn't keep reading.
person HHS
schedule February 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Faramir is sure in one hell-of-a-dilema.
person APB
schedule February 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is promising. But you shouldn't end every line of dialogue with an exclamation point. It appears as if they're either shouting at each other or constantly talking at the top of their voices which obviously is very unnatural and unlikely given the personal nature of their conversation.
schedule February 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG DUDE! I'm so glad you posted it! LOVE IT! Keep going with it dude, it has promise!