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April 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Marvelous! I love fics with Glorfindel playing the teacher. ^^ I think you captured the spirit of the elves versus humans very well. Something you could improve is perhaps the beginning. I like it, excpt that there is no clear sense of where you are. If you develop the scene's surroundings a bit more, I think the story will draw the reader in faster.
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April 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ok, that was a bit unfair. I know that you establish quite clearly in the first paragraph what the setting is like, just as you did with Glorfindel's chambers. What I meant is rather that you could have thrown in some hints as to what things look like more often, throughout the whole story.
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January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was so beautiful and hot! I love those "first time" fics; there is something so sweet and wonderful about them. Truly well done and I hope to read more from you soon!
Hugs,
Maelle.
Hugs,
Maelle.