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Part One

I have to label chapters or I get confused about what I have or have not reviewed.

We have lots of elvish here which I really like. I appreciate that you translate immediately rather than at the bottom of the page. If I have to scroll down it really disrupts my enjoyment of the flow of the story.

Elladan and Elrohir out having fun. Well they are young. What about three thousand or so, maybe less. Let the boys have their fun as long as it is at the orcs expense. Of course dad is always going to be glad to have them home in one piece but Glorfindel can understand their attitude.

The Dark One's eye fixed on Rivendell. It would be anyway. I am sure he knows where all the elven rings are. They would be spots of light in a dark world. Light he wants so much to extinguish. They will all be cloaked until they leave Rivendell which is a good thing.

I enjoyed the "ancients" and their conversation and then Mithrandir gets called "Old One" by Glorfindel, who is no spring chicken. His warriors having all seen more than one age of fighting. I can never really wrap my mind around being immortal.

Now we have all the dead orcs scattered around. Always a nice sight to a warrior. And the damage done by silvan elves from Mirkwood. The Noldo can keep their mouths shut about that. I wrote that before I read the scene at the ford. They do need to keep their mouths shut don't they? The messenger shows remarkable self control considering. Stupid Noldo.

I relished having Glorfindel and the messenger eyeing each other and assessing what is going to happen. The poor messengers not lasting long was sad. And this one being so young and the questions that brings up in Glorfindel's mind. Expendable or more trustworthy. My family is always quoting a phrase from "Thoroughly Modern Millie" So sad to be all alone in the world. Then we laugh. But the poor messenger is all alone having lost all his companions to the orcs and now having the Noldo make fun of him. How vile.

I like your Glorfindel. I have been reading a tale about him where he is less than noble. He is quite nasty as a matter of fact. I like him noble but flawed and in need of companionship. Preferably male.

Well the messenger has self control up to a point and the point has been over reached. After all he has his honour to consider. Elrond's honour is at stake also. Could his warriors not show propriety if not kinship to this messenger? Messengers were to be treated with the utmost respect and given the best treatment. They were emissaries of their respective rulers. The Noldo don't come off looking very good here especially the MoonShadow elf. Ha! He got fired. Put that in your elven pipe and smoke it you git.

Kind of a mixed bag here. Many of the other warriors look down on poor Cuthenin as more common than men. Kind of insular here aren't they? The need an attitude adjustment. Well no good will come of this. At least I hope not because strife and battle is much more interesting than elves swanning about looking good. Although a little of that is fun too.

So poor Cuthenin is under a heavy burden. He has a message to present and has lost his companions. It would be awful if he had to go back home alone considering how bad the orcs are. Well we shall see.

I look forward to reviewing the next chapter and please forgive any typos. They are the bane of my existence.

Hey!
What a wonderful surprise when I got up this morning and just thought I would check to see if anything had been updated. I don't care how long you take in describing things or getting to certain points. It's such a pleasure to read so well-crafted, not to mention well written, a story, I wish it would never end; although I know it must eventually.
I'm still trying to send that good karma your way. Take care.
Later,
Daphne

Great that you've updated. Amazing chapter!!!

Well worth the wait! Love that Thranduil gave his support and announced as loudly as he could that he loved this child of his, regardless of the circumstances of his birth. And that the princes also supported Legolas. Can you refresh my memories? Have they ever been jealous of their youngest brother? They seem to have completely accepted him as their own. And what of the rest of Thranduil's family? Have they more or less accepted him, perhaps have even become somewhat fond of him?

I'd like to hear more of this fellow that has incurred Glorfindel's disfavor through an admittedly eyebrow-raising act. What exactly were they doing? I assume that the cousin is also a follower and is thus examining the brands. And what of the two princes' assumption for the reason of Glorfindel's outburst? Was it genuine, or was it feinted for the purposes of covering for Legolas' preferences?

Oh, and can't wait for the grilling Glorfy's in for!! lol

I thought that the way Thranduil reacted to the news of his son's feelings was perfectly logical and incredibly believable given the storyline and background of the story you have written. It was still very hard to read at points simply because the emotions written were so raw and very painful. Beautifully written, as always.

Great chapter!!! I guess you choosed wisely, Thranduil loves Legolas and in time he will come to understand his son's option and accept it. I would love to see Thranduil giving him his blessing.

Sorry I haven't reviewed in a while, took me a bit to get caught up. I am, as always very impressed with your writing. In reading the last chapter, I wanted to reach in and smack the advisor, so glad was I when Glorfindel finally did. Furthermore, the sweet surprise in finding another ally for Legolas is wonderful and I can't wait to see what his character adds to the drama.

Another great chapter - all the more so because of the many revelations! But now that Galion has revealed his intentions, does he really think badly of Thranduil and Lhoss, or was that just part of the ruse?

I am confused by one thing. Galion says to Glorfindel, "As Faer Hebron, you cannot help but strive to prevent that." This is the first time Galion calls Glorfindel Faer Hebron. And so far, Glorfindel had not revealed himself to be Faer Hebron, no matter what Galion thinks! Yet Glorfindel does not react when Galion calls him that, not even inwardly? And when Glorfindel doesn't deny being Faer Hebron, shouldn't Galion have made note of this, at least a mental note?

As for including more of Galdor and Thranduil's talk about same-sex relationships, I think you have already covered the subject well. But since I don't know what you have cut, it's hard for me to say whether you should add it back in another chapter.

Eagerly awaiting more!

Nim

Oh goodness! An update! And the plot thickens.... They should probably fess up to Daddy, make things easier in the long run. But then where's the fun in that? Lovely as usual!

I've just read ch. 1, and I like your story very much. (I saw it recommended by an author I know and respect.) Beyond the thanks for writing, I might mention that I was puzzled that Legolas would leave his last arrows stuck in the 50 orcs he slew. He knew they were all dead, or so you heavily imply when he speaks of it to Glorfindel at the ford. That group of orcs attacked him after he'd already lost his other three companions. What if another troup of orcs were to attack before he got to Imladris? And sure ly it takes time to make an arrow. Would one retrieve them even if just for the arrows themselves?

I'll read on, of course, I'm enjoying it.