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May 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh Wow.
Why is Karl being so mean. Please update soon.
Why is Karl being so mean. Please update soon.
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July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ok,princess pirate, lets get this thing moving. please don't delay in updating this story, a little on the mushy side, but hey, its your story! and what, pray tell, do you have in mind for Karl?? maybe a good beating, or maybe some torture, or does he just need to get some!? any way, please continue.!!!!!
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June 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG! i had forgotten all about this story, i'm so glad you finally updated it. i really like it. karl is such an asshole, he needs to get his ass kicked. i'm glad viggo and orli are finally together, they make a cute couple. keep up the awesome writing! :)
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June 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It is a hilirious story, that I find myself waiting and waiting until you will update, and that is good, mellon-nin.
Keep up the PERFECT work that you are doing with your fic, and pretty please UPDATE ASAP!
Yours,
Sivan Shemesh sivan325@walla.co.il
Keep up the PERFECT work that you are doing with your fic, and pretty please UPDATE ASAP!
Yours,
Sivan Shemesh sivan325@walla.co.il
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April 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good story. Would like to see it finished.
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April 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i like it! thank god orli is ok. write more soon!
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April 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey!
That`s unfair! How can you stop at this damn cliffhanger...Please write a new chapter soon! I like your story!
That`s unfair! How can you stop at this damn cliffhanger...Please write a new chapter soon! I like your story!
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April 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ok princess, lets get to number 5 of this story. Like how you did this story so far, a little corny, but hey, its better than all of the bad words and cruelty that some other stories have got in them. please update soon!!!!!
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April 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well written, good grasp of narrative for a first-timer, nice descriptive style. But the story has a problem... it's about real people, yet the actions described are not realistic.
REAL adults don't push their co-workers into rivers, and if they do, they get fired or arrested. If Urban had done the pushing, and Bloom had been injured as a result, Urban definitely be arrested and probably do jail time.
When REAL people are pushed into rivers (the river in the scene you describe is calm), they either stand on the riverbed or swim. They don't just let themselves be helplessly swept away.
REAL leading actors get paid lots of money, they don't room together.
REAL river rocks aren't sharp enough to cut flesh.
REAL hospitals don't send people with nasty injuries home, until they're sure they're not going to get fevers or pass out.
And so on.
That's the problem with writing about real life, you can't get too dramatic. Too much drama isn't realistic, and isn't believable.
REAL adults don't push their co-workers into rivers, and if they do, they get fired or arrested. If Urban had done the pushing, and Bloom had been injured as a result, Urban definitely be arrested and probably do jail time.
When REAL people are pushed into rivers (the river in the scene you describe is calm), they either stand on the riverbed or swim. They don't just let themselves be helplessly swept away.
REAL leading actors get paid lots of money, they don't room together.
REAL river rocks aren't sharp enough to cut flesh.
REAL hospitals don't send people with nasty injuries home, until they're sure they're not going to get fevers or pass out.
And so on.
That's the problem with writing about real life, you can't get too dramatic. Too much drama isn't realistic, and isn't believable.
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April 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay!!! Bring update.