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January 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
@ Beth:
You DO realize I am laughing my fluffy little bum off every time you post those funny dialogues, do you? :D
And don't you DARE give Elven the option of a door no. 3!!! The girl has stuff to finish (*coughs* "Winter's Heart" *coughs again*) and sequels to write. And I swear to you, Elven, if you don't get a move on with "Winter's Heart" any time soon I will blackmail Beth, Freya and a few others to help me finish the damn thing ourselves, lol! I cannot help it, I am in dire need of some Rivendell smut that involves the three "Els". *g*
And as for "Where The Shadows Lie" Hey, we could make that the "extended berserker edition sequel" after all, wouldn't that be fun for all those lovely OCs? *veg*
And I am with you 100 % of the way, there is nothing wrong with a little (or rather a lot of) suffering in the la-la-land of Frosty and Elven... *grins and ducks in order to avoid flying objects*
You DO realize I am laughing my fluffy little bum off every time you post those funny dialogues, do you? :D
And don't you DARE give Elven the option of a door no. 3!!! The girl has stuff to finish (*coughs* "Winter's Heart" *coughs again*) and sequels to write. And I swear to you, Elven, if you don't get a move on with "Winter's Heart" any time soon I will blackmail Beth, Freya and a few others to help me finish the damn thing ourselves, lol! I cannot help it, I am in dire need of some Rivendell smut that involves the three "Els". *g*
And as for "Where The Shadows Lie" Hey, we could make that the "extended berserker edition sequel" after all, wouldn't that be fun for all those lovely OCs? *veg*
And I am with you 100 % of the way, there is nothing wrong with a little (or rather a lot of) suffering in the la-la-land of Frosty and Elven... *grins and ducks in order to avoid flying objects*
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January 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
XD That's awesome, Sandra. Yes, they really DO need to get their acts together. None so much as Valawen, although Alisceon/Niriel comes close. Yes, Where The Shadows Lie (the extended? Hot Damn! edition) really made Alisceon suffer. Not to mention Eowyn. But mostly just the former. ;)
Not that I *mind* you making them suffer... *whistles innocently*
Alura: WTF?!?
Me: Elves and Gondorians are hot. Trust me, dear, it's not about you.
Alura: Sure it isn't.
Me: Well, at least not your PERSONALITY, anyway.
Alura: That's it. I am SO going into Shieldmaiden/Beserker mode the next time you speak.
Boromir: *grins* Why wait?
Alura: ...I hate you.
...So, Elven, what are your future plans? New fic? Finishing Winter's Heart? Door #3? :D
Not that I *mind* you making them suffer... *whistles innocently*
Alura: WTF?!?
Me: Elves and Gondorians are hot. Trust me, dear, it's not about you.
Alura: Sure it isn't.
Me: Well, at least not your PERSONALITY, anyway.
Alura: That's it. I am SO going into Shieldmaiden/Beserker mode the next time you speak.
Boromir: *grins* Why wait?
Alura: ...I hate you.
...So, Elven, what are your future plans? New fic? Finishing Winter's Heart? Door #3? :D
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January 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey, Beth! Thanks! I do have a thing I'm not telling you, indeed. ;) Yes...that Denethor is a toughy to get ahold of. I'm trying not to make him too mysterious...but I think all will be understood once the thing to understand is revealed. This also ties into why Eomer is wonky. ;) The reason is ahead, not behind. :) I only hope it's a "not stupid" reason. ;D Thanks!
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January 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*leans over to Freya in kind of confidential gesture*
Could it be... *gasp* that Boromir is about to find his bl***y brain again? About time, I say! :D Then again, blonde males are a bit slower on the pick-up, aren't they?
I really enjoy the fact, this story is more canon for a change. It's interesting to learn about Elrond's call to all races of ME to gather in Rivendell from the Gondorian POV. It is something I liked in the Extended Edition of the Two Towers as well. To learn how dire the situation was in Gondor and Osgiliath when news reached them of the upcoming meeting in the house of Elrond. Very interesting perspective.
Now I am curious to see if Boromir actually does come to his senses and what he is going to do with his last two remaining brain cells (duh!)...
Keep up the great work! :)
Could it be... *gasp* that Boromir is about to find his bl***y brain again? About time, I say! :D Then again, blonde males are a bit slower on the pick-up, aren't they?
I really enjoy the fact, this story is more canon for a change. It's interesting to learn about Elrond's call to all races of ME to gather in Rivendell from the Gondorian POV. It is something I liked in the Extended Edition of the Two Towers as well. To learn how dire the situation was in Gondor and Osgiliath when news reached them of the upcoming meeting in the house of Elrond. Very interesting perspective.
Now I am curious to see if Boromir actually does come to his senses and what he is going to do with his last two remaining brain cells (duh!)...
Keep up the great work! :)
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January 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Forgot something as usual... *bangs head against the wall*
I noticed that you told this chapter from Boromir's point of view!!! That's a first, is it not? I know there is a chapter in Frosty's "Persuasion" where we see Aragorn and Faramir talk to each other, but that is not so much a POV as it is a chapter told from the outside observer's point of view. However, in "Masks" you used a different POV other than the OC's for a change which I noticed right away and found interesting (and don't you think I hadn't noticed, lol!). I mentioned this earlier, it is certainly something worth playing with and it was important for this chapter also as Boromir knows things about his relationship with his father and brother that an OC character would simply not be able to detect through mere observation or know about but which are neveretheless vital for the story. So... well done! :)
I noticed that you told this chapter from Boromir's point of view!!! That's a first, is it not? I know there is a chapter in Frosty's "Persuasion" where we see Aragorn and Faramir talk to each other, but that is not so much a POV as it is a chapter told from the outside observer's point of view. However, in "Masks" you used a different POV other than the OC's for a change which I noticed right away and found interesting (and don't you think I hadn't noticed, lol!). I mentioned this earlier, it is certainly something worth playing with and it was important for this chapter also as Boromir knows things about his relationship with his father and brother that an OC character would simply not be able to detect through mere observation or know about but which are neveretheless vital for the story. So... well done! :)
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January 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hehehehe...yeah. Thanks for noticing. The only reason I ever really don't delve too much into POVs is to keep everyone guessing as to who the badguy really is. ;) Since it's established now that Boromir doesn't know crap of what's going on...hehehe. I figured...why not? Thanks!
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January 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Creepy! It's always interesting to see how people write Denethor, as he is so readable in the movies and tiresome in the books, yet when one tries to write him he ends up being too mysterious for one to truly grasp his intentions. I'm not sure if you have him yet, but the dialoggue was good and in keeping with his character...my only concern is him trusting Faramir so quickly. Perhaps something has happened with the Palantir involving Faramir and you're not teeeelllling uuuuuussssss.... XD
Oh, and one more question: you say there's a more subtle reason that Eomer is acting the way he is. Do you mean it's concealed somehwere in the past chapters or do you infer that you haven't posted the part containing the explanation?
It's good; keep it coming!
Oh, and one more question: you say there's a more subtle reason that Eomer is acting the way he is. Do you mean it's concealed somehwere in the past chapters or do you infer that you haven't posted the part containing the explanation?
It's good; keep it coming!
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January 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*looks at Freya's review*
I think I can beat you on the weird flu bug recepies: WARM BEER! Seriously, it is an old actors' trick. Warm up some beer, drink it, you will start to feel VERY warm instantly. Get under a load of blankets and sleep of the flu. You will sweat out the infection, feel a lot better the next morning, your bedroom will smell like a Guiness Pub and what's more.... the warm beer will get straight to your head so you couldn't care less. :D What a fantastic remedy! ;) But use a good old Guinness or German beer for it (Australian might be a bit TOO much for this purpose...) not those light beers. Honestly, I am not a beer drinker to begin with, so this is the only time I ever do, lol!
As for Bormir: Oh well, I chased him around the dinner table for a few hours, he is all yours now, finish him off, girl, finish him off! *g*
I think I can beat you on the weird flu bug recepies: WARM BEER! Seriously, it is an old actors' trick. Warm up some beer, drink it, you will start to feel VERY warm instantly. Get under a load of blankets and sleep of the flu. You will sweat out the infection, feel a lot better the next morning, your bedroom will smell like a Guiness Pub and what's more.... the warm beer will get straight to your head so you couldn't care less. :D What a fantastic remedy! ;) But use a good old Guinness or German beer for it (Australian might be a bit TOO much for this purpose...) not those light beers. Honestly, I am not a beer drinker to begin with, so this is the only time I ever do, lol!
As for Bormir: Oh well, I chased him around the dinner table for a few hours, he is all yours now, finish him off, girl, finish him off! *g*
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January 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oooh...things are not looking good. "Something's rotten in the state of Rohan...Gondor...whatever."
I like this plot. But I always like plots with seeing stones in them. ;)
I like this plot. But I always like plots with seeing stones in them. ;)
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January 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
...Oh, and don't listen to that jerk-off what's her name. I mean, the title of your web site is "The Kingdom of Mary Sue." We know and expect deviations from Tolkien because if everyone spent 10 hours a day researching and one writing, no one would ever attempt an AU ever again. I did that for a while, but I spent way too much time on the details and never wrote much, and now I have to go back and start over again because I forgot what my plotline was!
The key to good fiction is that it is ENJOYABLE. You have a consistent plot line, you plan ahead (or at least appear to very well!), your grammar and syntax are excellent 99% of the time, and I never find myself distracted from your chapters by excessive typos like so many fanfic writers out there. The fact that yoiu both write frequently in Sindarin attests to your talent. Few writers have mastered the tongue of the Sindar substantially enough to even attempt using it in their fiction. It's very impressive to read it. At the risk of sounding arrogant myself, you have better grammar then several Harvardians I've met during college, including a few who auditioned for and enrolled in a fiction writing course with me. Moreover, there is no FLUFF in your fanfic. I am eternally grateful for that. *cough*Darkfic rules!*cough*
Don't be discouraged. Just hit the delete button. If idiots like ZeeDrippyVessel can do it when they receive legit criticism for their crappy fics, so can you. Constructive criticism is one thing, but ranting without a modicum of netiquette is quite another.
As for my own criticisms, I really couldn't find anything in Chapter 11. I wish I could be more helpful, but it was such a good chapter! The only thing that puzzled me was Eomer's rapid behavioral mood swing, but I'm sure you'll explain it to us eventually. ;)
The key to good fiction is that it is ENJOYABLE. You have a consistent plot line, you plan ahead (or at least appear to very well!), your grammar and syntax are excellent 99% of the time, and I never find myself distracted from your chapters by excessive typos like so many fanfic writers out there. The fact that yoiu both write frequently in Sindarin attests to your talent. Few writers have mastered the tongue of the Sindar substantially enough to even attempt using it in their fiction. It's very impressive to read it. At the risk of sounding arrogant myself, you have better grammar then several Harvardians I've met during college, including a few who auditioned for and enrolled in a fiction writing course with me. Moreover, there is no FLUFF in your fanfic. I am eternally grateful for that. *cough*Darkfic rules!*cough*
Don't be discouraged. Just hit the delete button. If idiots like ZeeDrippyVessel can do it when they receive legit criticism for their crappy fics, so can you. Constructive criticism is one thing, but ranting without a modicum of netiquette is quite another.
As for my own criticisms, I really couldn't find anything in Chapter 11. I wish I could be more helpful, but it was such a good chapter! The only thing that puzzled me was Eomer's rapid behavioral mood swing, but I'm sure you'll explain it to us eventually. ;)