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by liorajean

person ldkelly
schedule May 27, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I"m so sorry, but you really need to work on your "love" scenes. They are just not right. I don't feel the emotions that should come with a good story.

Oh, so sorry....Try again.
person vestalvagrant
schedule May 20, 2003 at 12:00 AM
"He placed his hands proudly on his hips, as he stood, gloriously naked, with his clothes scattered around him. He raised his eyebrows and smiled cheekily at Pippin."

That is such a pleasing mental image. I will remember that one. Overall, this is cute-sexy, which I think I prefer for Hobbits. I don't really want to imagine full-on Hobbit porn. But this was good.