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That was so breathtaking - your new chapter 1! I don't know how you can come up with somthing so deep like that! You should write your own novel!

Iorhael

There's another fic here that is similar to this, so I'll basically say the same thing. Merry would never do such a thing. It's completely OOC, even if it is AU or whatever. Frodo bore the Ring for at least a year in the books before submiting to its power, and he was on the brink of death, weak from lack of food, water, and adequete sleep. Yes, he was tempted many times, but he never started torturing those who he held dear to his heart. I know, everyone has a different reaction to the Ring's lure, but I still doubt Merry would be so easily corrupted by a Ring he has never touched. Perhaps I could buy Merry giving into the Ring's temptation and tormenting his loved ones, but only over a longer period of time. Merry suddenly torturing his beloved cousins and friend is not realistic at all. As someone else mentioned, these are not Tolkien's hobbits. You've createmonsmonstrosity.

You are a good writer, but you've chosen to write a very poor quality fic.

Emma, I'm forced to review here as ffnet again is acting strangely. BTW, oh, poor, poor Frodo! I don't know what to say but I too craved for touch if being left like that. Please, please update sIor

This is adorable! I love Pippin, and I love Frodo! And they care so much for each other!

So, because Pip shivers when he hears his own name, does that mean that even on the subconcious end of his mind, he's terrified of Merry without realizing it? Well, until Frodo pointed it out.

What is happening to Sam in all of this, and will Frodo meet up with him again, maybe as a "good for you" for staying awake without food or water?

I hope that they get a chance to run away again, and that Pip goes with them. Merry is just a jerk. I know he doesnt mean to be, but he is.

Continue quickly, okay?

This is ridiculous. You should put this under original fiction, because these aren't anything like the hobbits Tolkein writes about. This is just torture for torture's sake, and while I'm sure the twelve years olds who don't need characterization or believability love it, the rest of us thing it's ludicrous. I agree completely with the reviewer that said to go back and change them so they read like Tolkein's characters. Merry is a HOBBIT, and tolkien says over and over again that Hobbits are practically incorruptable. You're telling me that Merry is just NEAR the ring and he's completely slave to it?

Please, you write decently, but you need to put some thought into this. This is like a snuff film. It's like pron. You don't give it a plot at all, you just go from one scene of torture to another. Please, please, think about it before you keep going.

Ah, I'm so glad I can still read the newest chapter here. Ff.net is really disappointing! Poor Frodo and Pippin. Now what things did Merry need to discuss with him? Hasn't he trusted Frodo enough about Gandalf?

Iorhael

I really love this story so far. I have to admit that I have this disturbing fascination with these kinds of stories...must be the Frodo angst... So keep posting! I'm always looking forward to reading a new chapter.

He he he. I come here, Emand and I post my story too to try my luck! Gosh, you've been so successful!

Wow. That was a very good chapterh poh poor Pippin, whatever is he going to do? Eeek.
Wish I had more time. Would write longer review. May do so later.
I do think my favorite was the last chapter though.
Hmmm. Not sure. This one is close.

This fic is so amazing. Poor, poor, deluded Pippin. I love how impossible it is for him to see Merry for what he truly is. I am truly afraid for Frodo, and can't wait to read the next chapter. I hoerryerry is redeemed eventually, though, knowing what he did is going to tear him up for a good long time. I really loved the bit in this chapter where Merry was wrestling with the shredded remains of his concious. Very well done. I eagerly anticipate more. Yep. And thanks for the email about the update! ^_^ Makes my life easier. *L*