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May 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
AWWWWW
This is AMAZING.
Poor Orli, but a fab ending!
This is AMAZING.
Poor Orli, but a fab ending!
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October 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh, i'm so happy that you finished this!!! i loved the ending! sucked that so many people died though...the poor little dear will have to growup without his aunt...but he has 2 lovely daddies now...so sweet...
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December 20, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great new chapter. can't wait for the nxt one, plz cont soon!
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December 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
this is really really good. read all 31 chapters today, plz update soon, cant wait to find out wots happenin....
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December 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
AAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! sameone save orli
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December 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
AAAHHHH!!!! What are you doing to me you cannot leave it like that write more now right now !!!!!!!
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December 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
absolutly fantastic i was gutted when id read all 29 pages and no more were there please update soon this is a great bit of fiction xx
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November 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is such a great story! You are an awsome writer, and also very original. You can keep anyone guessing until the very end! I also love how you update so often. Please keep it up, so I can see how this ends!:)
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September 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Um ... wow ... is the first thing that comes to mind. Really. This is a great piece of writing. It's so hard to believe you haven't done much writing up to now.
Hmmm ... lets see ... you're pace I think is just right. It's fast enough to keep the reader interested, and slow enough to build anticipation and suspence. Very well done. I like the "voice" with which you write, it's an easy, flowing kind of story-telling that makes the story comfortable to read and just makes you want to snuggle up and read more. *hinthint*
If I may make one sugion,ion, set your scenes with more detail. When you tell us that Orlando is lying in a hospital room, what does it look like? Where is the bed? Um ... what is Orlando wearing, or Viggo for that matter? I don't mean describe to death, but give us a .... hmm ... visual que as to what you are seeing in your mind when you write it. It can't possibly improve your excet fit fiction, but it might enrich it to a degree. I don't know ... just a suggestion.
Again, excellent work. Write more soon!!!
Hmmm ... lets see ... you're pace I think is just right. It's fast enough to keep the reader interested, and slow enough to build anticipation and suspence. Very well done. I like the "voice" with which you write, it's an easy, flowing kind of story-telling that makes the story comfortable to read and just makes you want to snuggle up and read more. *hinthint*
If I may make one sugion,ion, set your scenes with more detail. When you tell us that Orlando is lying in a hospital room, what does it look like? Where is the bed? Um ... what is Orlando wearing, or Viggo for that matter? I don't mean describe to death, but give us a .... hmm ... visual que as to what you are seeing in your mind when you write it. It can't possibly improve your excet fit fiction, but it might enrich it to a degree. I don't know ... just a suggestion.
Again, excellent work. Write more soon!!!
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September 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
What a great story! I love this wonderful Orlando angst and can't wait to find out more of Orli's past. Please update soon!