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August 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I've been reading this story just tonight, and I know it's going to drive me crazy if it isn't finished, and given the care you are lavishing upon it, I'm sure the next few chapters can't be the end.
Very fine writing, and you're so good at getting to the emotional truth. As one who sometimes copyedits for a living, may I just mention a couple of things you may want to correct? "Would you rather us go someplace else?" I think you mean, "Would you rather we go someplace else?" And "you're shoulder . . ." should be "your shoulder . . . ."
Thank you for writing. I hope you're happy I'm up all night reading this and will pay for it tomorrow! I told my mate I'd be up soon. Hah! I hope he didn't wait.
Dpes this tell you whcih chpater I've just finished? Ch. 15.
Very fine writing, and you're so good at getting to the emotional truth. As one who sometimes copyedits for a living, may I just mention a couple of things you may want to correct? "Would you rather us go someplace else?" I think you mean, "Would you rather we go someplace else?" And "you're shoulder . . ." should be "your shoulder . . . ."
Thank you for writing. I hope you're happy I'm up all night reading this and will pay for it tomorrow! I told my mate I'd be up soon. Hah! I hope he didn't wait.
Dpes this tell you whcih chpater I've just finished? Ch. 15.
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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi!
Gasp! What a terifying description of that rape, and hurt. No, I do not think Morehua should be stopped from killig that beast and monster next time. Saeldies is nobody who should get any chance to ever again harm anybody; not Legolas, and not - heavens beware - another Elfling.
And Thranduil never saw anything of this?!
Aislynn
Gasp! What a terifying description of that rape, and hurt. No, I do not think Morehua should be stopped from killig that beast and monster next time. Saeldies is nobody who should get any chance to ever again harm anybody; not Legolas, and not - heavens beware - another Elfling.
And Thranduil never saw anything of this?!
Aislynn
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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi!
Tharanduil needs to be hit over the head in this story. Several times. Blind, never liostening, delivering his son back into the arms odf a monster. And I really, really hope Saeldis dies a horrible death and a quite painful one, too. He deserves it!
Aislynn
Tharanduil needs to be hit over the head in this story. Several times. Blind, never liostening, delivering his son back into the arms odf a monster. And I really, really hope Saeldis dies a horrible death and a quite painful one, too. He deserves it!
Aislynn
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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi!
This is an unbelievable good story! You deal with MPS here in a quiet astounding way, and very well, too; and it works! The shifts and mood swings are very well described, and Legolas behavioris very intriguing. I aöso like the idea of the wary trees.Great fic and very well written! Thank you for this!!!
Aislynn
This is an unbelievable good story! You deal with MPS here in a quiet astounding way, and very well, too; and it works! The shifts and mood swings are very well described, and Legolas behavioris very intriguing. I aöso like the idea of the wary trees.Great fic and very well written! Thank you for this!!!
Aislynn
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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay! Go, Morehua!!!! Go! Go!
I really want to see this beast killed for good....
But then I also want to hurt Thranduil. And Aenor, although he was just the victim. But Thranduil troubles me. How could he be so blind? How could he betray his child like this? Worswe to know that many parents are like this for real, looking away where they should be aware and listen.
Great stuff and writing!
Aislynn
I really want to see this beast killed for good....
But then I also want to hurt Thranduil. And Aenor, although he was just the victim. But Thranduil troubles me. How could he be so blind? How could he betray his child like this? Worswe to know that many parents are like this for real, looking away where they should be aware and listen.
Great stuff and writing!
Aislynn
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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi!
Now, isn't Saeldis a nice one... wasting no time to make sure his host has the worst possible impression about the just arriving new guest,and being quite delighted when he sees it has the desired effect. Normally, one would ask himselfif Saeldis suspected that his charge had started the fire on purpose, and was of a disturbed mind, why he did not tell Legolas father,and would think it significant that he had left Mirkwood afterwards. But then, Elrond is not too believing either... PoorLegolas. I am very concerned about him (or should I say, them?)
Aislynn
Now, isn't Saeldis a nice one... wasting no time to make sure his host has the worst possible impression about the just arriving new guest,and being quite delighted when he sees it has the desired effect. Normally, one would ask himselfif Saeldis suspected that his charge had started the fire on purpose, and was of a disturbed mind, why he did not tell Legolas father,and would think it significant that he had left Mirkwood afterwards. But then, Elrond is not too believing either... PoorLegolas. I am very concerned about him (or should I say, them?)
Aislynn
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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ding-Dong the tutor is dead, the wicked tutor... but at what price! may Saeldis never be released of Mandos. Too bad the Elves do not have a hell... Very disturbing chapter, though very great writing. I love the image of the forest and the tree.
WOW, what a ride!
Aislynn
WOW, what a ride!
Aislynn
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August 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hi!
WOW!!!! The personality shifts are written marvelously and leave me breathless. And Saeldis is quite aputz.Not very diplomatic to mention that specialsentence in the very house of Elrond and to the sons of Celebrian, but then it was not meant for *them* to hear, mainly, wasn*'t it? Grrr!!! What aglibry git!
You write great. This fic has me hooked good, although I came late to read it.
Aislynn
WOW!!!! The personality shifts are written marvelously and leave me breathless. And Saeldis is quite aputz.Not very diplomatic to mention that specialsentence in the very house of Elrond and to the sons of Celebrian, but then it was not meant for *them* to hear, mainly, wasn*'t it? Grrr!!! What aglibry git!
You write great. This fic has me hooked good, although I came late to read it.
Aislynn
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April 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I wanted to compliment you on what an excellent story you've written. It was very believable in all ways, the flashbacks, the multiple personalities, etc. I totally enjoyed it. Also, the bonding ceremony is perhaps one of the beautiful versions I've read. Great job!
Frances
Frances
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March 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Just wow. This whole story is amazing.
I normally avoid this kind of story, rape is not for me. However, it was recommended to me by a close friend, so I took a look. I started to read and you had me hooked. It is just fantastic. You made me cry too, curse you, but it is really an excellent story.
The way you developed each of the different 'voices', his personalities, was wonderful. There was a depth to each of the characters that it would have been easy to miss out on, but you managed to make each of the splinter personalities realistic.
I'm not a fan of abusive Thranduil, but a busy Thranduil is very believable. Thank you for keeping his integrity intact, even if he was neglectful.
I also appreciate how you were careful to put in a lot of time between Legolas returning from the Halls and he and Glorfindel admitting what they felt. Many stories that have the main character raped usually have the whole Healing Sex (tm) with whoever happens to be the chosen love interest. And also that taking the step was difficult for Legolas. There were memories very much alive within him if given sway, and usually authors forget that being abused and raped is traumatic. Victims do often become asexual, and it is so wonderful to read a well written and thought out story that I can't even begin to describe it to you. You dealt with a difficult topic well, not with the callus disregard many authors these days, most of which use it as a plot device.
I'll stop my ramble now, I have to get going, but anyways, a great story, wonderful effort.
~Sarah
I normally avoid this kind of story, rape is not for me. However, it was recommended to me by a close friend, so I took a look. I started to read and you had me hooked. It is just fantastic. You made me cry too, curse you, but it is really an excellent story.
The way you developed each of the different 'voices', his personalities, was wonderful. There was a depth to each of the characters that it would have been easy to miss out on, but you managed to make each of the splinter personalities realistic.
I'm not a fan of abusive Thranduil, but a busy Thranduil is very believable. Thank you for keeping his integrity intact, even if he was neglectful.
I also appreciate how you were careful to put in a lot of time between Legolas returning from the Halls and he and Glorfindel admitting what they felt. Many stories that have the main character raped usually have the whole Healing Sex (tm) with whoever happens to be the chosen love interest. And also that taking the step was difficult for Legolas. There were memories very much alive within him if given sway, and usually authors forget that being abused and raped is traumatic. Victims do often become asexual, and it is so wonderful to read a well written and thought out story that I can't even begin to describe it to you. You dealt with a difficult topic well, not with the callus disregard many authors these days, most of which use it as a plot device.
I'll stop my ramble now, I have to get going, but anyways, a great story, wonderful effort.
~Sarah