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its been so long since u updated for this story!!!! update please. im so happy that they're getting their family started already but dang that was fast!!! lol. way to go legolas *nudge nudge* updaoon oon

ohhhhh. another update!!! ur takin a bit longer to update than the first story but i like it still. though there might be a misunderstanding in this chapter. im under the impression from the 4th chapter that legolas has already joined with thalia physically but in this chapter thalia has an anxity for their wedding night b/c she was still a virgin. can u clear that up in the next chapter? well other than the few spelling errors and grammer problems the story is okay. its building from "Salvation" and legolas and thalia are finally goin to get married. i cant wait!!! ohh and wat ever happened to thalia playin the matchmaker for glorfindel and her mom...its kinda weird to think about havin a biological mom and non-bio dad but i like the concept. i hope u update soon. oohh another thing that i think that would help the story is that there be a divider when the POV changes. it makes it flow a bit better cause reader arent confuse when they dont know that the POV has changed. well as i said update soon.

Putting two naked people who are in love in bed or in a bath is not a very good idea if they are supposed to wait with love making. The idea appears to be unrealistic and the characters...well, impotent. Any desire, passion between them will be very difficult to put into words later on and will definitely lose its effect.