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July 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooh what happened what happened ooo what happened!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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July 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WWWWWOOOOOOOWWWWWWEEEEEE!!!
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April 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Boy, Glorfindel sure is FLEXIBLE!! Very nice!
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April 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
the whole story has been great - please don't stop now and hurry up and add more chapters
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March 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ah, now you torture ME. I have been reading your story tonight, and I admit, I did not think I would finish it. I like your writing, so please don't get me wrong when I continue by saying I find the need for a copyedit frustrating. I was pulled into the story in spite of the "Elder" for "Eldar," and many times (maybe most) you mix up "to" and "too," and also "then" and "than." Sometimes the distraction of these and the odd misspelling are detracting from your story. For me, rather constantly, because I AM a copyeditor. But, I read on, growing more and more addicted to your story, and puzzling over how well you drew me in when I kept thinking I would read no more.
I found Glorfindel irritating at first, and disliked him. I didn't review then because I don't like to say anything unkind. Now I am totally drawn in. I almost feel you wrote to this point just to torment me! I'm up far later than I should be (I have a project to finish tomorrow, and came up here just to give my old cat a chance to figure out she should come back inside. She is teasing me also.)
Your Erestor is your best character. I like how he is strong and confused, leery but wanting to be loved, gentle and yet tough. I am worried about Celebrian -- she is coming off as the "bad guy," when you think she'd have been grateful about her sons being saved. It was odd she never thanked Erestor, and at that point I began to feel she was a little unrealistic.
Elrond is a little flat. You give him exactly the same line ("I think they'd be good for each other") a couple of times, making him appear a bit stupid. I'd like to see him fleshed out a bit more since he appears often. I'm a little confused about how he knows Erestor and Glorfindel both well, and they have both been in his emply, but don't seem to know each other at all well at the beginning of the story.
I almost feel you are the Glorfindel to my Erestor! You so leave me at a cliffhanger! Never have I felt so teased by a story. Now I will say probably what most fans say: please write more and SOON.
Please remember: in spite of my (I hope) gentle criticism, I am truly drawn into your story, find the unfoling love between your characters charming (though I'd like to know more about when Glorfindel had a change of heart from wanting Erestor as a conquest to loving him--I was afraid for awhile that after taking Erestor, he was going to say, Ha! Gotcha! Had ya once and don't need you any more!"). Your love scene here is totally hot, and leaving us in the middle is mean!!! (Though I also feel I deserve it for not reviewing as I read.)
K
I found Glorfindel irritating at first, and disliked him. I didn't review then because I don't like to say anything unkind. Now I am totally drawn in. I almost feel you wrote to this point just to torment me! I'm up far later than I should be (I have a project to finish tomorrow, and came up here just to give my old cat a chance to figure out she should come back inside. She is teasing me also.)
Your Erestor is your best character. I like how he is strong and confused, leery but wanting to be loved, gentle and yet tough. I am worried about Celebrian -- she is coming off as the "bad guy," when you think she'd have been grateful about her sons being saved. It was odd she never thanked Erestor, and at that point I began to feel she was a little unrealistic.
Elrond is a little flat. You give him exactly the same line ("I think they'd be good for each other") a couple of times, making him appear a bit stupid. I'd like to see him fleshed out a bit more since he appears often. I'm a little confused about how he knows Erestor and Glorfindel both well, and they have both been in his emply, but don't seem to know each other at all well at the beginning of the story.
I almost feel you are the Glorfindel to my Erestor! You so leave me at a cliffhanger! Never have I felt so teased by a story. Now I will say probably what most fans say: please write more and SOON.
Please remember: in spite of my (I hope) gentle criticism, I am truly drawn into your story, find the unfoling love between your characters charming (though I'd like to know more about when Glorfindel had a change of heart from wanting Erestor as a conquest to loving him--I was afraid for awhile that after taking Erestor, he was going to say, Ha! Gotcha! Had ya once and don't need you any more!"). Your love scene here is totally hot, and leaving us in the middle is mean!!! (Though I also feel I deserve it for not reviewing as I read.)
K
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March 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Sorry I haven't been here in awhile, but Celebrian is a bitch ain't she?! ANYWAYS, ERESTOR IS VOCAL, ERESTOR IS VOCAL, ERESTOR IS VOCAL! YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYY! THANKIES! *Huggies and wuvs you!* UPDATE SOON PLZ!^^
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March 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
And it was getting good too!
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March 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
First time reader here, very good story, oh how I do love my captain and advisor together. What's going on with Celebrain. We need to get rid of that bitch...would love to seee Elrond paired with someone else. Ha Ha. Keep it coming
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March 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
forget the sequel and speed this one along - am thoroughly enjoying it but the slow pace is maddening
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March 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's a total mystery to me as to why Celebrian is acting that way.Why indeed?