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June 14, 2004 at 12:00 AM
sence
repeted
hermind
moaved
carrassed
chissiled
Spell-check, please spell-check! I suggest running your story through 'Word' or even an email edit program
that will spell-check for you, some even do a grammar check as well. Take the time to proof read before
you publish as well. I think you havgoodgood start but this story was a difficult read just due to the grammatical
and spelling issues. You have a good handle on keeping a scene lively and exciting. Your over all descriptions
are vivid. Your story is definitely worth reading, and I hope you write more; just polish it a little before you
present it. Your writing has a spark that many others are definitely missing!
repeted
hermind
moaved
carrassed
chissiled
Spell-check, please spell-check! I suggest running your story through 'Word' or even an email edit program
that will spell-check for you, some even do a grammar check as well. Take the time to proof read before
you publish as well. I think you havgoodgood start but this story was a difficult read just due to the grammatical
and spelling issues. You have a good handle on keeping a scene lively and exciting. Your over all descriptions
are vivid. Your story is definitely worth reading, and I hope you write more; just polish it a little before you
present it. Your writing has a spark that many others are definitely missing!
schedule
June 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Well, I can tell you that I liked it. Very much so. Elrond as a horny virgin-ruining elf-lord. Fascinating. Go ahead and write more. I can't wait to see what could happen next.
schedule
June 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow! i think you should definately carry on with her i want to see how they handle the aftermath of this!
i enjoyed reading it PLEASE carry on!
i enjoyed reading it PLEASE carry on!
schedule
April 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Very nice, I'm enjoying it so far. And to answer your question, why not do both? Introduce more girls and let them all get to know each other. Perhaps they could plot some sort of group revenge.