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by Aany

person a female
schedule July 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I was just looking for some inspiration for my femslash when I ran across your story. I like the idea of it and all but you make it slightly confusing the way you *randomnly* have the scenes placed. That first scene has no apparent connection to the last few, they at least have a connection. Please don't be extremely upset by anythiing I say. I'm just trying to give you some advice. Anyhow, are you a girl because if you are then it doesn't seem like you've ever really masturbated. At one point it seemed like the blonde elf (whom I suppose is Galadriel) had her entire fist inside herself and that's not very likely. Next, women don't really come with 'leaking juices'. I don't know maybe my personal experience is limited but what you wrote had a great idea to it nut was lacking in structure (I know it's a PWP) and semmed to have a few, shall we say, biological errors. Sorry if this review upset you, I know you were probably all excited you had another review. Love your idea though!
person Valent
schedule March 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is truly a work of art, it is a great story, and captures the characters well.
person Anonymous
schedule March 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This wast just so out of character, but at the same time so fucking hot! I want to read more fics like this one.