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ROFLOL regarding the lip thing! ;) Don't worry, it never bothered me in any way, but when you are a writer (even though English is not my native tongue) there are certain things you are bound oticotice after a while like this one (and I actually only noticed after I had some time recently and read through all your other LOTR stories or I probably wouldn't have noticed in the first place). By the way congrats on your homepage. I am not a big Star Treck fan, so I gave those stories only a quick glance (I never liked Scott Bakula to begin with, lol!), but I like reading your LOTR stuff there without having them broken into chapters. It was also interesting to see when each story has been written and I must say one can clearly say just how much you improved through time. You really make an effort to come up with a nice plot, you are working on your characters and the tension that evolves from the plot as well as the interaction between the protagonists makes the adult stuff all the more fun (nothing like a good fantasy!). I also noticed you really tried to make the language ME style, so to speak (as far as I can even be the judge on that as a non-native speaker). I also like the way you use the Elvish in your stories, very sexy. Oh, BTW, since you don't break your stories up into chapters on your website, it might be better to give the translation of the Elvish there whenever it is used. Since the stories are quite long, it is a bit inconvenient to scroll all the way down to the end and up again to find where you left off. It is fine here on AFF though, as you have separahapthapters, add the translations to each of the chapters and one does not have to scroll an awful lot.

Babbled enough... congrats on finishing THE LOST (which, of course, I had already finished reading on your homepage!) and get a bl...y move on with "In Darkness and In Doubt"!!! I already read the second chapter on ff.net and like Beth I am eagerly waiting for more.

Have a great weekend, R.

Another great chapter. I really like the fact you are taking your time with this story so it can develop the way it should. Keep up the good work. One other thing and I think it has been mentioned before: Your characters keep licking there lips an AWFUL lot and I find it totally out of place when they do. I would drop this, it never really fits and reminds me (don't laugh!) of that LL Cool J / Jennifer Lopez video, where LL Cool J licks HIS lips every two seconds ;)

Rah! I'm glad at com complicated interplay of emotions in the last few chapters--you seem to be improving as you go along (and every writer is in need of improvement). And now a cliffhanger! But at least I have "In Darkness And In Doubt" to keep me company while I wait for more. Although I think "Where The Shadows Lie" will always be my favorite. (i read your stories at ff.net, too.)

Sorry I didn't review again any sooner. But I am certainly still reading! :) It's a beautiful story and in many ways your best one yet, at least in my humble opinion. I particularly like your portrayal of Aragorn and the fact one cannot be sure whether to trust him or not. That makes for a lot of tension and I am eagerly awaiting you next chapter!

What an interesting plot, very insightful as to what might happen if Elrond truly sought vengence for Arwen! Pleas continue with this I'm looking forward to reading how this turns out!

So much hurt...mental physical and emotional
Vi

Wow, I really like the idea of an "Evil Elrond", he really emanates power and a kind of darkness in this story. And I kit wit was going to be him, that would be Anólindë's darkness, Galadriel spoke of. Great chapter! Keep them coming, I want to find out if Andë ndë still has the guts to stand up against Elrond after that!

Brrrr, things are getting REALLY tense now! I just wish good old Galadriel was a bit clearer in her prophecies, lol! It must be plain annoying having her around. Can't wait to see what happens next. Oh, one small thing: During his talk with Haldir Legolas refers to Aragorn as King Aragorn of Gondor. However, while Legolas may still have called him Aragorn, his official title would now be King Elessar of Gondor (even in AU! *g*...). Update soon!

Mmmh.. I really like a good story with a twist and this certainly seems to have one! Also, given the fact this story is as all your others AU I still like the way you portray your characters and Aragorn in particular in this one. He seems so strong and yet so sad. As mentioned earlier it is nice when you cannot be sure who the good guys are and who the bad guys. I am very eager to see where this story is heading! Also, your descriptions are good, the way people look, their movements, the way their voice changes. Plus I think you are good at writing dialogurticrticularly one that has confrontation in it. I am very eager to find out where this one is going!

PUT ON YOUR GLASSES, BETH! You are NOT the only one reviewing here!!! ;)