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by driretlan

person Kendra
schedule October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Dude, I hate flamers, but please get either a beta or spell check!!!! Arwin is supposed to be Arwen, Elron is really Elrond, and you spelled legolas and strands wrong in the first paragraph too!
person Kittynip9
schedule February 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
No, no, NO! DOn;t leave us hanging there, like that! Keep going! KEEP GOING!
person Su
schedule February 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is an interesting story. I don't mean to be harsh but it could use some editing to correct spelling errors, missing letters, and sentence structure. It would be easier to read if the statements made by the characters were put on seperate lines instead of all in one paragraph. Btw, it's "Arwen" and "handsome". I hope I don't come off as mean. I see you have potential to do better and it takes courage to post your story. I admire that.
person My life
schedule January 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hmm, I hope indeed you meant this to be a parody. It could have been funny if only your writing techniques would improve some.
person meg
schedule December 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Best parody of a Mary Sue. Ever! Really funny...nice job.