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You have a very intriguing plot going here and it makes me curoius to see where you take is. It does however need to be strengthend a bit. There were a few times that I found myself falling out of the story for lack of discription. But this is something that can be fixed with practice. I want to know more about why Celeborn and Galadriel want Haldir to raise the child. What is this child? Why is she so important? These things can be hinted at without revealing it. Sort of making the reader go "Oh, yeah. Why didn't I pick up on that before?" type thing. Feel free to contact me at the above address if you have any questions about my review. I'm always glad to help a fellow writer.
Ithilin

That is a very good story Tilara! I like it a lot! It is interesting and the interactions between the brothers are funny. You should update your stories more often. :)

Nice story. I know this may sound dumb, but they don't sound like elves. They speak more flowery than that. They do not say shut up, more like silence or Dina ev It It means be silent. anyway, i'm hopinr mor more!!

LOL Now this should be good! The proud Marchwarden saddled with a baby. Oh the possibilities!

I think this story has some great potential. I absolutely love Haldir!

Yeah i'm the first to review, well I like the story so far. can't wait to read more.

Look forward to more chapters.