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April 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh my God!!!!!!!!!! That was amazing. Any Legolas fan should be required to read this story. It's incredible. Update! Please! :)
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April 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
OH YEAH!!! You never fail to please and pease you do. (evil grin)Maybe I should try that on my boyfriend. Now, UPDATE, UPDATE,ATE!ATE!!!
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April 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hehehe You go girl!
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April 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*furiously taking notes* This is like a love manual of naughty things to try. *smirks* E insists that we practice until we get it perfect. Darn. I am reduced to a quivering pile of goo, thanks to you! LOL
You are absolutely evil....evil...evil (but very good at it).
More, more, more!!!
Instead of gold stars, I have decided to designate your stuff with towels. Three towels!!!
Tal
You are absolutely evil....evil...evil (but very good at it).
More, more, more!!!
Instead of gold stars, I have decided to designate your stuff with towels. Three towels!!!
Tal
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April 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
NOTE OF CLARIFICATION: Very large fluffy beach towels are used in my rating system.
Tal
Tal
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March 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!1 PLEASE UPDATE! THIS IS A REVIEW! UPDATE!!! Thas sos sooooooooooooo good! I love Legolas' POV... and when he thought the twin were never going to believe him.... há!
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March 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I am awestruck. *fans self* You never cease to amaze me! It is amazing to read their actions from each perspective. Its amazing how you can so accurately depict his actions/reactions and demonstrate a completely different point of view for the same act. Most authors can't come close. *squirms in chair* Anyway, you know I love you. Can't wait for the next update.
A very Wanton Elfbanger indeed!
A very Wanton Elfbanger indeed!
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March 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
You hope you made someone happy? Sorry to disappoint you hun, but you didn't make me happy...you made me ecstatic! I was so happy to see an update on this story so soon, as it has quickly become one of my Top 5 adult faves :o) So much to love about this chapter, but don't wanna be too wordy. I'll just quote my fave part then:
"She takes a shuddering breath, her body still recovering as she raises her head, meeting my eyes. //And for the coupe de grais…// I bring my hand, wet with her essence to my lips, sucking one finger into my mouth before slowly licking my hand clean, savoring her unique flavor. //Mmmm… Vanilla and… pomegranates. She tastes as sweet as she smells.// Her incredulous gaze is transfixed on my mouth."
OH..MY..WILL! Since I have a hand fetish, I was flippin' over this part of the story in the last chapter, but THIS...the way he describes her tastes...and likens the SWEETNESS to her smell...OH MY WILL! Bloody brill!
Other brief notes: love the teasing Legolas, love the possessive Legolas, and I am ad atd at how hard he worked at keeping himself under control JUST FOR HER PLEASURE (that's SO not real life, right? Men don't do that :oP).
I am LOVIN' this story beyond anything, so I sincerely hope for another quick update! Thank you for it!
"She takes a shuddering breath, her body still recovering as she raises her head, meeting my eyes. //And for the coupe de grais…// I bring my hand, wet with her essence to my lips, sucking one finger into my mouth before slowly licking my hand clean, savoring her unique flavor. //Mmmm… Vanilla and… pomegranates. She tastes as sweet as she smells.// Her incredulous gaze is transfixed on my mouth."
OH..MY..WILL! Since I have a hand fetish, I was flippin' over this part of the story in the last chapter, but THIS...the way he describes her tastes...and likens the SWEETNESS to her smell...OH MY WILL! Bloody brill!
Other brief notes: love the teasing Legolas, love the possessive Legolas, and I am ad atd at how hard he worked at keeping himself under control JUST FOR HER PLEASURE (that's SO not real life, right? Men don't do that :oP).
I am LOVIN' this story beyond anything, so I sincerely hope for another quick update! Thank you for it!
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March 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Der! Forgot to add that I LOVE the way all of chapters from his point of view are written. The way they are worded and what is said...it stays within HIS character, and that's great! So many authors just don\now now the voice of an already established character, but you obviously do :o)
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March 15, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Our friend, Tal, is the one who pointed me the way of the story. I'm a fan of adult fanfic involving Orlando Bloom, and admittedly, am a pirate wench before I'm an elf lover. But...I must say, a story like yours can make me re-think my position!
I just finished reading Ch. 8, and I'm completely spent! Well, actually, more like right on the edge of being spent, LOL. I'm afraid I am way too into your story because I swear I feel everything you write, so when the chapter ended right before....uh, completion, I had to stifle a scream so as not to wake anyone else in the house :oP
The idea of one story being told from two point of views didn't seem like something I would enjoy at first. I thought it would be repetitive anding.ing. BOY, did you show me how wrong I was! I don't know how....scratch that....through amazing talent and imagination (or maybe experience? Something I sadly lack), and a gift for really erotic description (without being nasty, though), you've made this story one of my fave ALL TIME adult stories! I am sincerely hoping you try a Will Turner fic in the future because...OH MY WILL, with how this story is affecting me, a Will fic from you will no doubt SLAY me! Now, for a bit of feedback:
first off, I really love your characterization of Legolas. He's very masculine (whereas he's being borderline femmy/a pushover in other fics I've tried reading that he's a character in). I also SO enjoy how he teases. Good GOSH, that gets me. In Ch. 8, when he was thinking, "Cum for me" or "That's it, scream for me" you had me in a puddle! Guh! That's just so sexy! What I've read/seen on TV/heard of real men and my own very limited experience with my 2 exs....they really don't give a crap about a woman's sexual satisfaction. So the fact Legolas is purposefully HOLDING himself back, JUST to please her as much as possible is not only incredible/make fae fall in love with him...it's sexy as hell. But then there's that teasing quality I love where, yeah, he'll make her orgasm countless times...but he's going to draw it out and make it last as long as possible. The thought of HOURS of intense lovemaking...the way YOU describe it/write it....with jus just gives me major tingles :oP
Secondly, just by coincidence I'm sure, but you happened to hit on one of my MAJOR turn ons with his incredible point in your story:
She takes a shuddering breath, her body still recovering as she raises her head, meeting my eyes. //And for the coupe de grais…// I bring my hand, wet with her essence to my lips, sucking one finger into my mouth before slowly licking my hand clean, savoring her unique flavor. //Mmmm… Vanilla and… pomegranates. She tastes as sweet as she smells.// Her incredulous gaze is transfixed on my mouth.
I happen to have a MAJOR hand fetish, meaning my own are a hot spot I often fantasize about someone having fun with, and I am a sucker for a man with GORGEOUS hands (like Orlando). Sot wht whole bit right th...i...imagining him licking his own gorgeous fingers....I was dead! Mighta passed out like in the story for all I know, LOL. But the way he described her flavor, and said she "tastes as sweet as she smells?" OH MY WILL!! SO great, vivid, and just KILLER!!
I love the possessive tone in many of his thoughts in this chapter as well. That always has an effect on me...when the male really really WANTS the female character, and it's portrayed in words or actions or thoughts. It's just sexy to me, and since I inevitably put myself in the female character's "position" in a story I read (if it's well written and I can relate...or WANT to relate, in this case ;o)) it is always a major plus!
And the end of the chapter...how cruel! LOL, actually, I love that Legolas hach ach a "male ego" side to him and thinks about how he can brag that he made her pass out, and that he smugly smiles and challenges HER. Now, I'm dying to see HER do to HIM what he's just done for her. Tease and tantalize him mercilessly, 'til he's screaming for her.
*satisfied sigh* Sorry to be so rambly, but whenever I send an author feedback, I try to be as specific and wordy as possible. As someone who has TRIED writing before, I think it's good to try and let someone know what you enjoy/what works for you so they know what to try and keep up or work on or whatever. All you need to do is just keep the unrelenting sexiness of this story going! As I said before, I really appreciate your talent for SERIOUSLY EROTIC writing that isn't crass or dirty. I admit, I am a lover of "dirty talk" in stories (imagining Orlando saying swear words or "dirty" things just sends me over the edge), but too much of that kind of language is gross and a BAD thing. You have a talent where you don't even NEED that, though, 'cause your description is so specific and vivid. I am physically affected by your writing, if that is any indication to you of how great you are :oP Probably an overshare, but .... oh my Will. You are just amazing, and I THANK YOU for writing this story and sharing it!
My onlyuestuests would be for a Will Turner story in the future (although I THINK elves/LotR is your specialty, right?), keep up the hand details, and if any screaming goes on, making him or her scream out each other's names seems super sexy to me, as does kisses between the shoulder blades :oP But I leave it to you, the professional, as I KNOW you will not disappoint :o)
Thank you again for this story, Shannon! Absolutely incredible!
SONIA
I just finished reading Ch. 8, and I'm completely spent! Well, actually, more like right on the edge of being spent, LOL. I'm afraid I am way too into your story because I swear I feel everything you write, so when the chapter ended right before....uh, completion, I had to stifle a scream so as not to wake anyone else in the house :oP
The idea of one story being told from two point of views didn't seem like something I would enjoy at first. I thought it would be repetitive anding.ing. BOY, did you show me how wrong I was! I don't know how....scratch that....through amazing talent and imagination (or maybe experience? Something I sadly lack), and a gift for really erotic description (without being nasty, though), you've made this story one of my fave ALL TIME adult stories! I am sincerely hoping you try a Will Turner fic in the future because...OH MY WILL, with how this story is affecting me, a Will fic from you will no doubt SLAY me! Now, for a bit of feedback:
first off, I really love your characterization of Legolas. He's very masculine (whereas he's being borderline femmy/a pushover in other fics I've tried reading that he's a character in). I also SO enjoy how he teases. Good GOSH, that gets me. In Ch. 8, when he was thinking, "Cum for me" or "That's it, scream for me" you had me in a puddle! Guh! That's just so sexy! What I've read/seen on TV/heard of real men and my own very limited experience with my 2 exs....they really don't give a crap about a woman's sexual satisfaction. So the fact Legolas is purposefully HOLDING himself back, JUST to please her as much as possible is not only incredible/make fae fall in love with him...it's sexy as hell. But then there's that teasing quality I love where, yeah, he'll make her orgasm countless times...but he's going to draw it out and make it last as long as possible. The thought of HOURS of intense lovemaking...the way YOU describe it/write it....with jus just gives me major tingles :oP
Secondly, just by coincidence I'm sure, but you happened to hit on one of my MAJOR turn ons with his incredible point in your story:
She takes a shuddering breath, her body still recovering as she raises her head, meeting my eyes. //And for the coupe de grais…// I bring my hand, wet with her essence to my lips, sucking one finger into my mouth before slowly licking my hand clean, savoring her unique flavor. //Mmmm… Vanilla and… pomegranates. She tastes as sweet as she smells.// Her incredulous gaze is transfixed on my mouth.
I happen to have a MAJOR hand fetish, meaning my own are a hot spot I often fantasize about someone having fun with, and I am a sucker for a man with GORGEOUS hands (like Orlando). Sot wht whole bit right th...i...imagining him licking his own gorgeous fingers....I was dead! Mighta passed out like in the story for all I know, LOL. But the way he described her flavor, and said she "tastes as sweet as she smells?" OH MY WILL!! SO great, vivid, and just KILLER!!
I love the possessive tone in many of his thoughts in this chapter as well. That always has an effect on me...when the male really really WANTS the female character, and it's portrayed in words or actions or thoughts. It's just sexy to me, and since I inevitably put myself in the female character's "position" in a story I read (if it's well written and I can relate...or WANT to relate, in this case ;o)) it is always a major plus!
And the end of the chapter...how cruel! LOL, actually, I love that Legolas hach ach a "male ego" side to him and thinks about how he can brag that he made her pass out, and that he smugly smiles and challenges HER. Now, I'm dying to see HER do to HIM what he's just done for her. Tease and tantalize him mercilessly, 'til he's screaming for her.
*satisfied sigh* Sorry to be so rambly, but whenever I send an author feedback, I try to be as specific and wordy as possible. As someone who has TRIED writing before, I think it's good to try and let someone know what you enjoy/what works for you so they know what to try and keep up or work on or whatever. All you need to do is just keep the unrelenting sexiness of this story going! As I said before, I really appreciate your talent for SERIOUSLY EROTIC writing that isn't crass or dirty. I admit, I am a lover of "dirty talk" in stories (imagining Orlando saying swear words or "dirty" things just sends me over the edge), but too much of that kind of language is gross and a BAD thing. You have a talent where you don't even NEED that, though, 'cause your description is so specific and vivid. I am physically affected by your writing, if that is any indication to you of how great you are :oP Probably an overshare, but .... oh my Will. You are just amazing, and I THANK YOU for writing this story and sharing it!
My onlyuestuests would be for a Will Turner story in the future (although I THINK elves/LotR is your specialty, right?), keep up the hand details, and if any screaming goes on, making him or her scream out each other's names seems super sexy to me, as does kisses between the shoulder blades :oP But I leave it to you, the professional, as I KNOW you will not disappoint :o)
Thank you again for this story, Shannon! Absolutely incredible!
SONIA