AFF Fiction Portal
person jackie
schedule January 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I'm sorry, but this is dreadful - its so stilted!!
The plot is great but needs more fleshing out and less use of the word "said" when people are talkin, other words could be - replyed, answered, mentioned etc etc.
It soes have the potential to be a really good story......
person lovingelves
schedule October 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
hey thank u heaps, really appreciate it.
person sivan325
schedule October 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Nice ending...so fast it gone.

Very beautiful story.
person sivan325
schedule October 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
This is very good, more please...
person lovingelves
schedule October 17, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I will....i have some chapters waiting, but i have 2 wait 4 my beta
person sivan325
schedule October 16, 2003 at 12:00 AM
You return him very nice, now keep up with the good work, and bring us another chapter.

You did it well.

I can't wait to read more.
person sivan325
schedule October 15, 2003 at 12:00 AM
More please...

It is very good, I can't wait to read more.

Poor Legolas...let him live...
person lovingelves
schedule October 15, 2003 at 12:00 AM
hi, thanks again for compcompliments, i do have the chapters already..but im not telling yet...i just have to wait for my beta to return them :)
person lovingelves
schedule October 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
hi thanks again....once this one is finished i will be starting on the sequel of the sale for love :)
person sivan325
schedule October 12, 2003 at 12:00 AM
You put a cliffy is so good. Poor Legolas.

More please.

You did it well.

More please...please