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by Merewen

person L3
schedule December 24, 2003 at 12:00 AM
That was so weird! The kid calling Legolas momma? Legolas having he and Aragorn's babies? Sorry, wasn't to my taste.
person Playmara
schedule October 4, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hi,

I stared to read your story, but I had to stop halfway trough! There are so much mistakes, that it is quiet unpleasant to read :(. I also have no Beta reader and english is my second language, so I am sure that my own story is not perfect eiter, but you should consider to at least spell check your text with a computer program before posting it.
Well, as to the story itself: The plot so far was interessting, and you write in a vivid style that is quiet capable to stirr the imagination. I think your story has some potential.

Cu
person *
schedule October 4, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Love it! Very good. Very few mistakes that I saw. But why would they name their child Adan? Adan means Man.