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September 27, 2003 at 12:00 AM
im sorry if i have offended you but i did say "do not take this as a flame" and for your info just because you have studies quenya for three years doesnt myouryour good at it, read the other fics with elvish in it, ask people who are much more mature than you mellon nin is how you so it!!! AND IF PEOPLE SAY YOU HAVE BAD GRAMMER AND YOU KEEP GETTING RECIEWS ABOUT BAD GRAMMER THEN YOU HAVE.BAD.GRAMMER.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! get it threw your head im sorry but g dug dutch is no excuse for bad grammer if you can speak english its not hard to write it trust me and i DID SAY I LIKED YOUR STORY BUT IF YOU GONNA BLOW UP AT MEFOR A MERE SUGGESTION THEN IM NO T SURE IF YOUR STORY IS WORTH READING!!!! be considerate and take time in your work dont rush to get it posted make it perfect, and if this is the best you can do then you shouldnt be here you really shouldnt be here if your only 15 i mean come on its called ADULTFANFICTION
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September 27, 2003 at 12:00 AM
More please!!!
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September 27, 2003 at 12:00 AM
well if ur so troubled by it then dont read it.
and anyway it is my own choice if i am here or not and i really dont care about you yelling.
it wasnt to you anyway, do not think the whole world involves you, cause it definetely does not.
and anyway it is my own choice if i am here or not and i really dont care about you yelling.
it wasnt to you anyway, do not think the whole world involves you, cause it definetely does not.
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September 27, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm, I really don't like to see the review section turning into some kind of message board (really; this is not a place for discussion) but anyway, here's what I think.
Lovingelves, you DO need to improve your grammar, and even though you have a beta, she isn't exactly doing a good job here; what's the point in having a beta if she doesn't help you with f lif like this? Don't get me wrong here, this story is many times better than the first ones you posted here, so you're a fast learner, I grant you that;) It's not easy being fifteen and a nonnative English speaker, but you shouldn't blow off people who're offering to help you. We don't want to be mean - we want to help you, since obviously, your writing NEEDS improvement.
Lena, your comment was a bit harsh, and I noticed that your spelling and grammar skills aren't exactreatreat either... (It's "grammar" not "grammer" and you also need to learn the difference between "your" and "you're", and start using periods.) And lovingelves has all the right to be here in spite being fifteen; it is your state of mind that counts, not your age. Frankly, this that teenagers aren't "supposed" to read about sex is utter bullshit.
So, lovingelves, I do like your story, but please do us all a favour and find a beta who can polish your language. Trust me, if you do that, reviews like this one will cease.
~Amanda Lee
Lovingelves, you DO need to improve your grammar, and even though you have a beta, she isn't exactly doing a good job here; what's the point in having a beta if she doesn't help you with f lif like this? Don't get me wrong here, this story is many times better than the first ones you posted here, so you're a fast learner, I grant you that;) It's not easy being fifteen and a nonnative English speaker, but you shouldn't blow off people who're offering to help you. We don't want to be mean - we want to help you, since obviously, your writing NEEDS improvement.
Lena, your comment was a bit harsh, and I noticed that your spelling and grammar skills aren't exactreatreat either... (It's "grammar" not "grammer" and you also need to learn the difference between "your" and "you're", and start using periods.) And lovingelves has all the right to be here in spite being fifteen; it is your state of mind that counts, not your age. Frankly, this that teenagers aren't "supposed" to read about sex is utter bullshit.
So, lovingelves, I do like your story, but please do us all a favour and find a beta who can polish your language. Trust me, if you do that, reviews like this one will cease.
~Amanda Lee
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September 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hurry please!!!!
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September 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
this is a great story but you need to spell check it and nin mello not not how you say friend its mellon nin, i love your story and have read it everytime you update but if you like someone to proof read it i will be happy to, if you already have someone to proof it well get someone else they are not doing a good job i would hate to see such a wonderful writer be brought down because of some spelling and grammer errors, and do not run your thoughts together, put some description in it, uswe simlie's, metaphores, personification, and your story will be ten times better!!!! dont take this as a flame its not a flame i am merely giving yuou some suggestions for better grammer and how to make your story even better then it is!!
my email is Lenawhitetree@aol.com if you would like to email me!!! great story please continue, atleast think about my suggestions?
my email is Lenawhitetree@aol.com if you would like to email me!!! great story please continue, atleast think about my suggestions?
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September 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
for someone who has been studying quenya for 3 years i do believe im doing well on composing my elvish sentences without any help, dictionaries or whatever.
like i said, im dutch and only 15, but i try very hard to make something good over it and you all just keep complaining about grammer and spelling, like i said, u cannot expect me to be good in something all at once, i ALSO got to learn it.
-sivan, lady, what do you think, im thinking about seazing writing-
like i said, im dutch and only 15, but i try very hard to make something good over it and you all just keep complaining about grammer and spelling, like i said, u cannot expect me to be good in something all at once, i ALSO got to learn it.
-sivan, lady, what do you think, im thinking about seazing writing-
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September 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
So now the pairing will be Thranduil/Elrond ?
"I'll make sure that he'll not hurt you"
Go on, I can't wait for more.
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September 26, 2003 at 12:00 AM
hehehe im not gonna betray anything.....but the next chapter will include some legolas/haldir slash, which already started a bit in chapter 19
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September 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
More punishment for Thranduil!More I say!!!