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Not bad, I only read the first chapter and I'm sure it will be better once its betaed as the English is very stilted.

Sorry but this story is difficult to read, full of spelling mistakes and grammatical errors. Maybe it needs to be checked over before posting???

i didnt put this up thinking that ppl wouldnt go complaining, its one of my first stories & it has been beta-d i know now she didnt do a good job, but im not planning to make it better, the story got updated by a mistake, my apologies, but please stop this, i know its bad, just read Forever and always & narcissist, those are my newest

Ehm. You know how some authors put a "don't like, don't read" into their summaries? You probably won't like this review.

You have been warned.

First of: the sentences are by far too long. If you use that to represent speech, or high emotions, o.k., but doing it constantly makes the whole story appear like a hasty listing of events. So please: shorten down your sentences.

A lot worse: The story makes very little sense. The characters are OC, and their's no earthly reason for their actions - Thranduil's wife dies, so he decides to sell off his son? Feels awfully like "I just like that situation and couldn't be bothered to make up a good reason". As, for example, Thranduil being influenced by some evil. Saruman, Sauron, somebody.

To prestall the "I can write what I like": Yes, you can. To save yourself from reviews like this: put up a OOC warning, and in an ideal world, a note that the plot doesn't always make sense.

Or make up characters which resemble the elves and write an original fiction - I don't see the point in using characters and places Tolkien spend decades to make up, if hardly a single characteristic is the way Tolkien described it.

I left my e-mail adress, so you can rant at me if it makes you feel better.

I realize now, after going through previous reviews, that you have had many people saying the same things that I have[in my earlier review], and that my review, in itself, was rather superfluous. I do appologize for esizisizing a point that has obviously been made to you several times. Finally, i would like to offer to bata your stories, if you haven't yet found someone else to do it. If you do, in fact, want my help, you can e-mail me.

WoW

very good storyline, however (and I don't mean this to be a flame), the bad grammer and writing made this incredibly difficult to read . Because of this difficulty in reading, I lost interest several times, and in many places, I was extremely confused at what was going on. I really don't mean this to be a flame, however, I would seriously suggest a bata reader. I am sorry if ths ofs offensive, but if you put the effort into having this bataed, and then rewrite it, I think that the time and effort will be worth it.
~Stargazer

So sweet.

Why? Why it's over?

It was so good story.

You did it well.

I loved what I read.

SWEET!!!They're married!Absolutely,you must write a sequel!Please?

hi...well...i will once i finished ''Learning love & desire''